My Little Pony Fan Labor Wiki talk:Workshop/A Shadow's Creed/@comment-4126310-20120312044240/@comment-4126310-20120312132025

It's better, but still highly confusing. The Character section as it is now makes no sense to someone who doesn't already know the story. The purpose of the summary isn't to get readers interested in reading the story; it's to summarise the story, all of it (or at least the important parts). Providing character biographies should be an afterthought, not the main course.