User blog comment:Bleck11/uneeded blog/@comment-76.93.218.5-20130127051045

I likt you're going with a draconequss OC, so here's a little critique.

1.  I understand Draconequus aren't supposed to have orthodox designs, but his colors clash way to much. Take a look at Discord, while his green leg and blue wing throw off the design, it's subtle as the rest of his body is dark and dull. He pulls off looking strange but is still easy on the eyes. There's chaotic, and then there's obnoxious.

If anything, change the green body to something that compliments at least two of these items, the neck, either wing or the left arm.

2.  After reading some of his page, I'd say you should rework his personality a little. In short, he's Discord with a paint job. Arrogant prankster who hides malovent intentions under the guise of a fun guy? Who can bend time and space to his vary will and reverse the personalities of his victims? Takes time to blow rasbarries at the royal sisters? I'm telling you that's both Discord and Darnemis.

Try to come up with a unique spin on the reality warper type, give him different motives and different ways of screwing with ponies. Perhaps have him find enjoyment in sending ponies into maddening mood swings, or have him live only to be the biggest jerkwad on the planet, you know, the kind of guy who only does things if it'll screw over someone else.

Sure, the whole bring darkness and destruction to Equestria thing works, but it's a little cliche. Seriously, that and become a god are basically the two most over used RPG villain motives if not used creatively.

3.  More nitpicking than anything here:

-  Exclude the explanation on his name. Darnemis is actually a pretty good name, but the explanation comes off as a little tacky. It'd work if you're going for meta humor, but in this case you don't need it.

- The Mad Doctor actually didn't debut in Epic Mickey, and is the main antagonist of 1933's the Mad Doctor (my favorite animated short). If you haven't seen it, look it up, it's really good.

- Assuming it's not an artistic choice, his left leg should be facing the other direction. If it is an artistic choice, play it off subtly so people will know it's intension, but don't be blantant about it.

- Minor thing here, but you might want to redisgn the face. It's too much like the typical dragon, so maybe you could give it a touch up to make it a little more unique.

If you can fix a few of these issues, I'm sure you'll have a pretty solid character.

By the way, what are you planning on doing with these characters of yours exactly? Can't say I'm Lord Anders #1 fan (in fact I'm the guy that criticized him last time), but you seem dedicated to what you do?

Going to write a fanfic or something? Or is this a role playing thing? All else fails you can try RPG Maker. Just a little curious, that's all.